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HandsomeKimDokja
HandsomeKimDokjaLv125mth
2024-10-24 16:30

The way author write POVs of different situations and people is really good and how the scenes are portrayed the description of world everything is well sought even im gonna take some pointers from the way you write, as i have a habit of adding too much details in plot need to trim it down a lil i think. Read it until 5 chaps and the pace history of the story the world building and lastly the naming sense are perfectly written. Hope it continues with more stable releasing.

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Original_Eternal
Original_EternalLv1

lol how much did he pay you to make that your nickname handsome kim dokja

HandsomeKimDokja
HandsomeKimDokjaLv12

Well that's confidential my client Oldest Dream is veryyy handsome mann

Original_Eternal:lol how much did he pay you to make that your nickname handsome kim dokja
Original_Eternal
Original_EternalLv1

really now how many slaps on yoo joonghyuk face handsome? 3 slaps or 4?

HandsomeKimDokja:Well that's confidential my client Oldest Dream is veryyy handsome mann
Original_Eternal
Original_EternalLv1

jang hoyoung is 2 slaps for reference

Original_Eternal:really now how many slaps on yoo joonghyuk face handsome? 3 slaps or 4?
HandsomeKimDokja
HandsomeKimDokjaLv12

Now we are civil people you know civil (. .. .4to5)

Original_Eternal:really now how many slaps on yoo joonghyuk face handsome? 3 slaps or 4?
Original_Eternal
Original_EternalLv1

damn that's a lot that sinful man he better stay away from my future wife

HandsomeKimDokja:Now we are civil people you know civil (. .. .4to5)
HandsomeKimDokja
HandsomeKimDokjaLv12

Thats strange i got the notification now after 6 days

Original_Eternal:damn that's a lot that sinful man he better stay away from my future wife
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Original_Eternal
Original_EternalLv1

weird

HandsomeKimDokja:Thats strange i got the notification now after 6 days
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Direxts
DirextsLv4

Short Summary: Without intending to offend the author, if you come with high expectations due to the reviews this novel has received, I’m sorry to say you’ll be disappointed. At best, and being generous, it’s a novel to pass the time when you have nothing else to read. Context for those who want an honest review before reading: The word “Extra” in the novel is just there to ride the wave of popularity for the “extra” genre. The MC is treated like the protagonists of typical Japanese or Chinese novels: he’s always in the right place at the right time to meet the main or important characters for the plot. The other characters exist solely for the MC's convenience. For example, the MC’s mother knows he was born with an ultra-OP bloodline and tries to keep it a secret by locking him up for the first five years of his life, changing his hair and eye color with magic so no one discovers his original traits. (This is confusing since later on, one of the heroines has the exact same hair and eye colors as the MC.) But then, the mother suddenly lets him go out and explore, leaving him with a caretaker who conveniently allows him to wander off to exactly where he needs to be to meet one of the novel’s main characters—who just so happens to be his age so they can become friends. In the end, the same overprotective mother inexplicably lets the MC travel with his new friend and his friend’s caretaker, even though there’s no reason for her to trust them after just a few days of knowing them. But this setup was necessary so the MC could be in the right place at the right time to meet another main character and save her. Even if you try to overlook these plot devices as necessary for the story to progress, some scenes take this to such an extreme that it’s impossible to ignore. For instance, (keeping in mind that the power system is broken—5- to 6-year-old children are stronger than experienced mercenaries or zone-boss monsters, but let’s ignore that since a character can be as overpowered as the author wants) one of the main female heroines was just passing through the MC’s remote village. Her carriage conveniently breaks down right in front of where the MC is. The MC ends up helping the blacksmith repair the carriage. The FL (female lead) is accompanied by the strongest human of the current era as her bodyguard, yet for no reason, he vanishes, leaving the MC alone to repair the carriage. This leads to the MC entering the carriage and talking to the FL. After a while, the bodyguard returns and attacks the MC, but the MC (a 5-year-old) easily dodges the attack. The bodyguard justifies this by saying he attacked because the MC was inside the carriage and might be an enemy. Seriously, if he were an enemy, the FL would’ve been dead 100 times over before anyone noticed. In another instance, the MC and his friend sneak out of their room, even though their caretaker—a supposedly powerful bodyguard for a prince—is asleep nearby and fails to notice two 5- and 6-year-olds escaping through a window just a few meters away. The MC sneaks out to save his friend, who decides to do something foolish by trying to rescue some slaves. Instead of waking the caretaker, who could easily handle the situation, the MC goes alone because, of course, he’s the all-powerful MC who can handle everything. Conveniently, another FL happens to be enslaved, and naturally, it’s more dramatic for the MC to save her. In yet another instance, the MC’s friend and another FL, both 5 or 6 years old, free some slaves by incapacitating a group of guards. After they succeed, the boss of the guards arrives, summons his personal guards to deal with the kids, and then complains about how much he lost because of them. Like, WTF, dude, you let them do it, so why are you complaining? But all of this was just to buy time for the MC to arrive and save the day at the last moment. It’s as if the characters lose all sense of logic just to make the MC look good.

Luffy_KuN
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