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2024-06-24 22:45

Not bed, could use a good editing, switching character names is a bit distracting at times. Switched Damian to Dimitri more then once and typos with Riga’s name change her to Rike and Ruka (not as bad). The story is good and original enough, main character is endearing but secondary characters are a bit flat. Not bad but could benefit by a bit more description even if merely from MC POV. Keep it up.

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Rachapone
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Give them a break, especially considering even in one sentence you misspelt Rika's name as well.

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