Review Detail of ImmortalClown in Eclipse Arcana

I'm going to leave an honest review now. I must say, this is a rather interesting story. Although I have a few complaints such as grammatical errors here and there. Then there is also the problem about the spacing. Please don't join your words together. It makes it hard for the readers to read. Make use of paragraphs when a character wants to say something. Apart from that, I think the story is okay. Continue writing this story, Author. And may the story bless you.