the idea isn't bad, the writing is alright the story development is meh it isn't really interesting but at least the mc has taken the first step toward accepting who he is. though that idea of mc splitting himself from Yagura isn't something that I would do it seems like a bad plot. as for the romance it is meh. Firstly romance isn't fitted for anime like One Piece Dragon Ball naruto etc because that isn't the focus instead makes the story bad and distorts the flow. Also, you could go for a female character that already exists instead of making an oc these were all the reasons I gave the story development such a low rating. as for the character design, it is understandable you haven't described even once one character. That's all I had to say, if you want to know what could be done better that's easy. Continue writing and not only will you improve but you will learn from your mistakes through trial and error. that's why I gave it a 3 out of 5 I could be harsher with my words but that's not the point.
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LIKEAhh, these aren't harsh words at all! But I think I should clarify that I am NOT going for romance. As of the 70th chapter there hasn't even been a single kiss on the cheek hahahah. I would speak on other matters but I think it's best to let the story speak for itself, thanks for reading and leaving a review ^-^
I see thanks for the clarification 👍
Question: is it even planned for the future? (I hope so). ^_^
Romance? Honestly in most of my outline it's just MC going about fixing problems and power building. There's some implied romance in some backstory but that's way down the line and it's just a backstory. If I see a clear opportunity for natural romance between two characters I'll go for it
I mean, romance is best left out, right?