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IMightStartLiftingLv37mth
2024-06-06 14:13

It's okay, though sometimes I feel like the novel was written by an AI, a few plot holes, and the story just processes too quickly, also doesn't feel like the main character has any actual problems or challenges, as he usually always wins

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Joel_Riven
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Thanks for the review I started writing this book on a whim without any prior experience or thoughts of writing I just had an idea to put something I liked out for other's to enjoy if possible Looking back to my previous chapters, I've also seen how fast the book has progressed and I'll try slowing it down And if you have any ideas on what would be nice to add you could also let me know Thanks a lot and I hope you enjoy reading it

IMightStartLifting
IMightStartLiftingLv3

I'll defintley keep reading as it's one of the more interesting stories on here, but other than that everything is fine

Joel_Riven:Thanks for the review I started writing this book on a whim without any prior experience or thoughts of writing I just had an idea to put something I liked out for other's to enjoy if possible Looking back to my previous chapters, I've also seen how fast the book has progressed and I'll try slowing it down And if you have any ideas on what would be nice to add you could also let me know Thanks a lot and I hope you enjoy reading it
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