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The_Jeffinator
The_JeffinatorLv411mth
2024-04-14 12:47

Needs work on the inner dialogue. Thought process of the mc is very robotic, excessively analytical, and frankly disjointed from the actual important things people tend to notice or think about. I can tell this won't be my cup of tea, hope the rest of you enjoy.

MHA: Shadow manipulation

Apandora
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13 Chs

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SkyRexx
SkyRexxLv14

Yeah I kinda agree with you here but other than the how the mc’s thought process it seems alright

10mth
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BrookeMtF556
BrookeMtF556Lv14

Pretty good story but has a few issues with the characters feeling kinda forced with how they talk and interact in the first few chapters. I love the original character that the protagonist is based on and her design in Gushing over Magical Girls so I’m glad to see them used in more fanfics on here. The only major issue is that the author hasn’t posted any of this story in like 7-8 months and left it at a cliffhanger and I can’t find anything saying when/if they will update it again.

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Mehhh_2324
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I liked it a lot of except for the end where genocide or wtv his name was took advantage of her but overall it's great and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

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