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2024-07-19 05:39

In chapter 3 there is a cliffhanger that doesnt get any conclusion for at least 20 chapters (till the last released chapter at this moment). this makes the story extremely frustrating to read and i will sadly drop this story here. just a tip: if you want your readers to care about the backstory dont put that backstory after a cliffhanger instead of resolving the critical cliffhanger. it takes every bit of momentum you build at this point and put it to zero while making your readers feel unrest.

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Duku_GanRyu
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yep till currently latest released chapter

ToriAnne
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Sorry for that, What is the cliffhanger in chapter 3? I definitely put cliffhanger in chapter 2, but that's the point—need to follow the flashback. Because it happens when they're in the 30s.

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