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Nasser98
Nasser98Lv313d
2024-11-08 07:29

Great story, bro! I've really enjoyed it from the very first chapter to the latest one. You've got something special here. However, I have a suggestion: consider drawing inspiration from Japanese sports manga and anime, especially when it comes to adding emotional depth. Series like Diamond no Ace or Haikyuu!! excel at incorporating sad or challenging moments without diving too deep into dark themes. Right now, it feels like you're introducing some really heavy, dark elements that don't quite fit the tone of a sports story, which should be more about youth, energy, and the spirit of competition. It's totally fine to have the main character face struggles on their journey to the top, but there are more fitting ways to explore those setbacks without turning every 50 chapters into a tragedy. You’re crafting an excellent story, and I truly believe it could be even better if you lightened up on the darker elements. I love your work, and I genuinely appreciate your storytelling. I just wanted to share my thoughts because I think your story has the potential to be even more enjoyable. Keep up the great work

Major League System

leeroycgna
4.7
654 Chs

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Sravan_Patri
Sravan_PatriLv1

Ch 600 had some crazy shit lol I have a feeling things might not be kinda bad unless Ken clears up the misunderstandings

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Sravan_Patri
Sravan_PatriLv1

What do you mean by darker elements just askin

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Nasser98
Nasser98Lv3

Fights, kidnappe, killing , every time an accident...

Sravan_Patri:What do you mean by darker elements just askin
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leeroycgna
leeroycgnaAuthor

Author here. Originally I posted this story back in January, taking it down as it was in another competition. However, since I did not have any great success in said competition, I have decided to upload exclusively to Webnovel. First volume is complete and I will be releasing 2 chapters a day while I continue to write the Second volume. For those of you who have already read the first volume, there have been no changes so unless you wish to rehash what you've already read, then there's no need to read again. A few points to note below: No romance in first volume despite the romance tag. MC is in Middle School and I am not one to write such things. This is primarily a slice-of-life/youth drama novel, mixing School Life and competitive sports together. The book is based in Japan. Names are read as (First name, Family name) ie: Ken Takagi, Daichi Suzuki. There are some Japanese puns/references throughout which I do my best to explain afterwards, even if it takes some of the humor away from it. No I am not Japanese, however I do my best to research everything possible. Most importantly, I hope you enjoy the story. Please feel free to comment below or on any of the chapters should you feel the urge to, I'd be happy to answer them.

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MonitoKing
MonitoKingLv15

Keep it up dude. Im really enjoying the book so far 🔥🔥

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HGells
HGellsLv14

This is a good story! I read it when it was originally uploaded and enjoyed every minute of it! I’m excited to see where the author takes book 2, although it has been frustrating to have to wait for it to come out lol. Hopefully the author release a big chunk of book 2 to start us off with a bang!

7mth
Rabbitt436
Rabbitt436Lv15

Try this out. You won’t regret it.. Story is amazing

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Zusaku
ZusakuLv5

i’ve already read the whole first book and was pleasantly surprised by the character development that the mc goes through, as well as the realistic behavior for most characters.

7mth
AntiRoxas
AntiRoxasLv15

This made me feel like i was watching "Major" for the first time again, just in text. Its fun and made me read everything in 2 days (300 chaps atm). If you like Sport novels thats the one you have to read. [img=exp][img=exp][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend]

4mth
ryan_biggins
ryan_bigginsLv15

I love baseball stories. This is one of my favorites. Usually would leave longer and more detailed review but I don’t want to spoil anything. Just read it and that’s telling enough. 10/10. Also author give me more chapters.

6mth
DaoistUEbGAB
DaoistUEbGABLv3

bro i liked it lot probably one of best sports novel are i ever read the thing i liked most thet mc doesn't have so called overpowered system he also has work but i also feel you are inspired by hitting zone in many scenes ok but i can't read further because i am poor 😙😙🥲😗

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WMROger
WMROgerLv13

Made me spend money after using this app for 6 years

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Aria_sakti
Aria_saktiLv13

Awesome book i like it and the characters are interesting

7mth
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