Overall Rating: 5/5
This work is excellent, but there are a few areas where it could still improve.
Writing Quality: 5/5
The writing is strong, though at times it leans into being a bit too descriptive. The author seems aware of this and is trying to balance the level of detail. The writing matches well with the comprehension level of most readers on this platform, who generally have a high school level of English, with some even lower.
Stability of Updates: 5/5
The author updates daily, which is great. However, the most important thing is that updates are consistent and that the author communicates any changes in schedule. Whether updates come daily, weekly, or monthly, it’s acceptable as long as the author keeps the readers informed. Since fanfiction authors are unpaid, expecting daily updates is both unrealistic and unfair.
Story Development: 5/5
This story is a Slice of Life fanfiction. The early parts of the story are action-packed, which makes sense when you consider the main character, Yasushi, and his background. The story slowly reveals that he had a difficult and violent past life. In this new life, Yasushi wants to change. The progress is slow but steady. For example, he starts opening up to his best friend, Furuya, and tries to handle problems in a more thoughtful way.
Yasushi’s growth is gradual but noticeable. At first, he often solves problems with his fists, but as the story progresses, he begins to think things through and uses the help of Jingliu, who has the resources to support him. By the middle of Volume 1 and throughout Volume 2, he has significantly reduced his reliance on physical force.
I’m satisfied with where the story is headed. It starts during Yasushi’s second year of high school, moves through the Summer Arc, and continues into his third year, then college, and beyond. With so many fanfictions out there, this one stands out as a refreshing and calming read.
Character Design: 5/5
The characters are well-developed and serve clear purposes. The main characters, Yasushi Futakao and Jingliu Yang, have shown good growth and continue to develop. I find their development very satisfying. The supporting characters, such as Furuya (Yasushi’s best friend), Xinyi (Jingliu’s friend and rival), and others, are also well-written. They are not one-dimensional and add depth to the story. Even the parents, who are not often in the spotlight, have important roles behind the scenes.
World Background: 5/5
The world-building starts off somewhat limited, focused on a fictional city in Japan with a decent level of detail. However, Volume 2 expands the world significantly, introducing two Chinese towns that Yasushi visits with Jingliu. The author does a great job of fleshing out these new locations. There are also hints that the elements introduced in these towns will play a role in Volume 3.
Overall, I am satisfied with it.
