upto chapter 16. every chapter are toooooo stretch. it could be summarized as " he retired, got cheat, buster call on his hometown, and killed the celestial dragon. i hope next chapter will not be stretch to much. some sentences are repeated over and over. ot has good story just toooo stretch.

Writer only have one good ability, one and only ability to brag about and stretch anything to make it long enough to made one chapter out one single line ,some time make two chapters from one single line. Last 10 or so should be one chapter and author Bragg and stretch them into 10 or many more chapters.

This fanfic is just bad. Just imagine a machine translated fanfic, but about 10% better.

Ich finde die Idee gut ein starken Charakter in den teil der Geschichte wurden von one piece einzufügen. Aber die Umsetzung ist schlecht da die Geschichte nicht wirklich von dem hauptcharakter handelt sondern eher die Reaktion auf ihm, die dann auch mehrfach von allen möglichen Parteien wiederholt dargestellt wird weshalb die einzelnen Kapitel kaum Inhalt bieten die die Geschichte voranbringt. Daher erinnert mich die Geschichte stark an chinesischen KI stories.

The grammar is all over the place, as is the stories factual information. Nothing seems consistent with Canon details, e.g. baileys vs belli, colonel vs captain, sky gold vs heavenly gold. I like the premise of the story, however the incorrect details in the story from canon, without any forewarning or explanation has put me off. If this is a translation, the author should be noticing and fixing these issues, or getting a Beta reader to do it for them.

source? what the source? Chinese title? ofj

Excellent book! Can't wait for more... [img=Your move][img=Your move][img=Your move][img=Your move]

Terrible translation, short chapters, many inconsistencies, no context, weak story (seriously? Chinese people can't make a strong protagonist without a system? Years of training to become a "colonel" navy...)

Yamamoto alone can raze the whole one piece world