Pretty brave for someone who doesn’t know that much about Warhammer 40k lore. But the chapters I have read don’t seem bad at all. On the contrary. I can tell that there was a lot of research done. Good job and I hope you continue.

The writing of this story is quite good. But the the biggest problem I have is the the fact you are writing a 40k fanfic with out some of the most basic lore about 40k. One of the worst is your lack of knowledge of the timeline of the Warhammer universe. The story would have been fine if you chose to start the story at a earlier point in the timeline like before the birth of the Old ones, but you chose to start the story only couples millennia before our time but the problem with this is that the war in heaven, the war in which the ctan and the old ones waged war in a galactic scale where planets were destroyed on a whim, happened 60 million years before the 41st millennium. This war was also the cause of birth of the first 3 Chaos gods as we know them as such you timeline does not make sense. Next this is more subjective but we warhammer fans enjoy when the story is happening in the 40k universe the set rules of the 40k world are followed and worked around not avoid with flawless overpowered characters who are not bound by the laws of the universe and are in the 40k universe for the sake of it. Therefore, I recommend conducting thorough research on the intricacies of the 40k universe to ensure a more authentic and cohesive storytelling experience.

Theres another Fan-Fic called Humanity Unchained, has 38 chapters(ongoing). this seems Suspicious AF

Bastante desagradable, en general lleno de huecos argumentales por a qui y por aya que se solucion con un capítulo especial que te explica los poderes cual cómic de las peliculas de rey de star war (nótese la ironía). Entiendo que es un autor novato al cual hay que apoyar y que soy un quejon por quejarme de un fanfic por el cual no se paga nada y lo comprendo pero me molesta que tome una idea como la de Reencarnarse en el emperador de la humanidad ( que de propia manera es polemico ya que nadie esta a su nivel) y le diera una ejecución tan.. desastrosa, espero sinceramente que el autor mejore su manera de escribir y que si puede un dia logre escribir algo desente que pueda ser digno de un contrato de la plataforma ( cosa que no es difícil ya que la gran mayoria de novelas de pago son porquería). En fin esto esta horrible pero puede mejorar con el tiempo espero, pero yo me voy pirando de aqui.

Good stuff man

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This book and author has potential I like the way of progress of the empire and the emperor……….