It's a good read, though I feel the writer has failed when it comes to the world background, it's explained very little, and the novel could be enriched with more depth in that regard. Everything else seems pretty good.
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Actually, I'm just learning how to write so I'm not too clear about this. As for the world setting, it is the same as Earth in the past but historically different. I think it's quite simple so I don't know how to describe it more clearly.
Yeah that’s what I thought, I guess what trying to say is that the world it’s self lacks its own lore. A way to build onto would be describing details about the political make up. Like details on kingdoms and names? Tell me if im wrong but i dont think a kingdom name was said once in the novel. Though i will say you did do well during the mountain kingdom negotiations, because you told details about the kingdom. I’m guessing this is alternate history, just based on my knowledge of real world history. Overall I gave a 4 star on world background because right now in the story it doesn’t really matter, and the character isn’t really focused on details much. So if he matures more maybe he will focus on those details more. That gives you the opportunity to learn more about descriptive writing. Anyway I like the novel and hope it’s a good learning experience for you.
TheCharacter:Actually, I'm just learning how to write so I'm not too clear about this. As for the world setting, it is the same as Earth in the past but historically different. I think it's quite simple so I don't know how to describe it more clearly.
Ahh forgot all of what you said while writing that, but a way to break down how to write more descriptive is to think about the location, its details, its name, its history that you make for it, and so on. So if you were to write about the mc making a sect and then 200 years later there’s disciples you might describe the history of how it came to be, for the readers purpose not the disciples getting a intro. Because they most likely would already know one of the first cultivators from history.
Doverow:Yeah that’s what I thought, I guess what trying to say is that the world it’s self lacks its own lore. A way to build onto would be describing details about the political make up. Like details on kingdoms and names? Tell me if im wrong but i dont think a kingdom name was said once in the novel. Though i will say you did do well during the mountain kingdom negotiations, because you told details about the kingdom. I’m guessing this is alternate history, just based on my knowledge of real world history. Overall I gave a 4 star on world background because right now in the story it doesn’t really matter, and the character isn’t really focused on details much. So if he matures more maybe he will focus on those details more. That gives you the opportunity to learn more about descriptive writing. Anyway I like the novel and hope it’s a good learning experience for you.
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Doverow:Yeah that’s what I thought, I guess what trying to say is that the world it’s self lacks its own lore. A way to build onto would be describing details about the political make up. Like details on kingdoms and names? Tell me if im wrong but i dont think a kingdom name was said once in the novel. Though i will say you did do well during the mountain kingdom negotiations, because you told details about the kingdom. I’m guessing this is alternate history, just based on my knowledge of real world history. Overall I gave a 4 star on world background because right now in the story it doesn’t really matter, and the character isn’t really focused on details much. So if he matures more maybe he will focus on those details more. That gives you the opportunity to learn more about descriptive writing. Anyway I like the novel and hope it’s a good learning experience for you.
