First things first. When it comes to grammar and phrasing, it is either nearly incomprehensible or overly verbose like an AI wrote it. As for the story, is it AU? Because mages aren't like they are represented in the story. 99% of mages are inhuman in some way, they seem far too nice just because author wants them as allies. I mean, Aozaki Touko is not that bad but she is definitely far worse than portrayed, as are Ophelia's parents. Also, more of a nitpick but magic and magecraft are far to different so using them interchangeably messes up the story. If it was once every now them it would be fine but author does it all the time. Other terms like Sealing Designations and such are also grossly misinterpreted. Heavy AU is the only explanation because some many foundational things are explained differently that they are in the lore.

Finally found an fgo fanfic that have fujimaru as an mc, it's so rare because of the Shirou fanfics lol, hope that it's good, will update when I finished reading to the latest.

Bless my soul Herc was on a roll Person of the week in every Greek opinion poll What a pro Herc could stop a show Point him at a monster and you're talking SRO He was a no one A zero, zero Now he's a honcho He's a hero Here was a kid with his act down pat From zero to hero in no time flat Zero to hero just like that When he smiled the girls went wild with oohs and aahs And they slapped his face on every vase (on every vahse) From appearance fees and royalties Our Herc had cash to burn Now nouveau riche and famous He could tell you what's a Grecian earn Say amen there he goes again Sweet and undefeated and an awesome ten for ten Folks lined up just to watch him flex And this perfect package packed a pair of pretty pecs Hercie, he comes, He sees, he conquers Honey, the crowds were going bonkers He showed the moxie brains, and spunk From zero to hero a major hunk Zero to hero and who'da thunk Who put the glad in gladiator? (Hercules) Whose daring deeds are great theater? (Hercules) Isn't he bold? Nobody braver, isn't he sweet our favorite flavor Hercules, Hercules Hercules, Hercules Hercules, Hercules Bless my soul Herc was on a roll Undefeated Riding high and the nicest guy Not conceited He was a nothin' a zero, zero Now he's a honcho He's a hero He hit the heights at breakneck speed From zero to hero Herc is a hero Now he's a hero Yes indeed

At first I don't have high hopes for the fanfic but I give it a shot and by the root I wasn't disappointed the fanfic got more consistent and the grammar gotten better and the story is pretty (in my opinion) so give this fanfic shot maybe you grow to like it too Sincere but you truly ly

If anything, I am writing right away. Everything that is described after is nothing more than my subjective opinion about the author's work. Whether to listen to it or not is solely the business of anyone who nevertheless reads my comment, which does not cancel your opportunity to still read the work that became the reason for my answer. I apologize in advance if I failed to adequately limit the emotionality of the answer With all due respect, but this is very, very difficult to read. Yes, the author admitted that English is not his native language, but this does not change the fact that everything is bad with the text. Direct speech is often not highlighted. The story simply jumps from mentioning one event to another without much detail. And let's not forget about simple spelling, syntax and punctuation errors. It's worth mentioning separately how everything is fixated on the constant repetition of how the heroes "can overcome absolutely everything together". It gives off the spirit of... well. you know those situations when the heroes win on the strength of friendship where they shouldn't have at all. Of course, there is no such thing in the fic, but the spirit of it is there. Although it all started very interestingly, with this play of contrasts of guilt and "a chance to do everything better", but, as for me, then everything got worse. If you want to see the hero's victory over the world of tough and cruel magi here, then... you will be disappointed. Here everyone understands each other, everyone is ready to unite for the sake of tomorrow. They give all of themselves, all their strength, their knowledge... It is already clear that this is not the world of Nasuverse. This is a good premise for a story, but oh my God, how much work needs to be done on this in the future.

I have to say this is the best Fate fanfic I've ever read, just wonderful, thank you author for this fanfic.[img=fuerte][img=recomendar]

as someone who has been reading this fanfic for a long time, it is going great even if it is not so daily which I get why, The Authewr is working on a lot of fanfic so it makes sense why there is no new one for a few days, I wish this story goes back to daily upload one day keep up the good work

What a fun and great story to read, as this is one of the best Fate Fanfic I have read, not only that but the character are done greatly and I can't wait for more Ch, as this is the best Fate Grand Order Fanfic I have read, and I hope that the Author continues this great work and finishing when it is attended

Ok have been reading this for a few days and all I can say it is Peak, also seeing each Ch and seeing your writing improve i can say this is great