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AKZALOTH
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2024-04-25 15:40

eu gostei um pouco da personalidade do protagonista ate ele fazer erros óbvios como revelar a capacidade de criar e curar, era óbvio que o AFO iria atrás dele.Também não gostei do gosto do autor e do protagonista, ambos são Furry, acho que isso foi o que mais me encomodou, foi como ver alguém beijando um raposa bípede, simplesmente asqueroso.tambem achei o protagonista poderoso demais, ou o autor vai fazer um nerf absurdo ou vai inventar um pretexto qualquer (provavelmente algo absurdo) para colocar um inimigo a altura, bom se isso acontecer eu não vou ta aqui pra ver.

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S4tus
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Tava relendo as reviws e vi a tua kkkk Minha resposta e que n estou fazendo um romance a base de foda como todas as fanfics fazem, n estou planejando fazer qualquer tipo de limão e por ai. Tbm eu meio que refiz toda a fanfic, n gostei muito do que fiz na antiror e gostaria de corrigir algumas coisas. Eu n escolhi a "furry" porq gosto e sim porq queria fazer algo diferente das outras milhoes de fanfic que escolhem entre Momo e a aquela gorato do Big Tree, tbm e meio pedofilo botar um MC claramente adulto mentalmente com uma garota. Eu planejo desenvolver a personagem junto com a relação para ficar aceitavel a realação entre os dois, n estarei simplesmente atirando o casal no meio da cara de alguem e falar isso é o casal da obra, eu estou fazer algo e desenvolvendo. Sei que isso não fará vc voltar a ler, mas espero que tenhas pegado a minha visão.

AKZALOTH
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Então é tipo uma amiga ou o protagonista furry ainda beija, se beijar na boca é furry, tem jeito não

S4tus:Tava relendo as reviws e vi a tua kkkk Minha resposta e que n estou fazendo um romance a base de foda como todas as fanfics fazem, n estou planejando fazer qualquer tipo de limão e por ai. Tbm eu meio que refiz toda a fanfic, n gostei muito do que fiz na antiror e gostaria de corrigir algumas coisas. Eu n escolhi a "furry" porq gosto e sim porq queria fazer algo diferente das outras milhoes de fanfic que escolhem entre Momo e a aquela gorato do Big Tree, tbm e meio pedofilo botar um MC claramente adulto mentalmente com uma garota. Eu planejo desenvolver a personagem junto com a relação para ficar aceitavel a realação entre os dois, n estarei simplesmente atirando o casal no meio da cara de alguem e falar isso é o casal da obra, eu estou fazer algo e desenvolvendo. Sei que isso não fará vc voltar a ler, mas espero que tenhas pegado a minha visão.
AKZALOTH
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Eu não lembro mais da fanfic....

S4tus:Tava relendo as reviws e vi a tua kkkk Minha resposta e que n estou fazendo um romance a base de foda como todas as fanfics fazem, n estou planejando fazer qualquer tipo de limão e por ai. Tbm eu meio que refiz toda a fanfic, n gostei muito do que fiz na antiror e gostaria de corrigir algumas coisas. Eu n escolhi a "furry" porq gosto e sim porq queria fazer algo diferente das outras milhoes de fanfic que escolhem entre Momo e a aquela gorato do Big Tree, tbm e meio pedofilo botar um MC claramente adulto mentalmente com uma garota. Eu planejo desenvolver a personagem junto com a relação para ficar aceitavel a realação entre os dois, n estarei simplesmente atirando o casal no meio da cara de alguem e falar isso é o casal da obra, eu estou fazer algo e desenvolvendo. Sei que isso não fará vc voltar a ler, mas espero que tenhas pegado a minha visão.
S4tus
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Bem, n tem como evitar então. Mas isso n será algo que farei agora, vai demorar muito porque tenho que desenvolver a personangem e fazer os leitores gostarem um pouco dela primeiro né.

AKZALOTH:Então é tipo uma amiga ou o protagonista furry ainda beija, se beijar na boca é furry, tem jeito não
S4tus
S4tusAuthor

Tinha deixado ela no limbo, mas eu voltei a escrever ela. Recomecei ela do zero, n tinha gostado da outra versão

AKZALOTH:Eu não lembro mais da fanfic....
AKZALOTH
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S4tus:Bem, n tem como evitar então. Mas isso n será algo que farei agora, vai demorar muito porque tenho que desenvolver a personangem e fazer os leitores gostarem um pouco dela primeiro né.
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