Grammar seems alright for a translation fic, character is too op, you literally wrote yourself into a corner with that nonsense. He has literally all the power in the world, multiverse level, and yet he’s ALMOST following the canon path. He saves Kota’s parents, helps out midoriya by making him smarter, which is fine, but what is the point when you are essentially a god? From the beginning you could’ve already destroyed the villains yourself and changed everything the way you wanted. You talk about changing society’s way but do nothing about it, also your character for some reason likes to act indifferent and edgy to the other characters for no reason, and then you have him killing the villains that pop up at his house. Then you make a clone to portray the role of a villain with no explanation, there’s so many plot holes stacked up on top of each other, it blows my mind. There are villains that have apparently attacked mc several times and they all die, but you have him nerf himself in the fight with muscular for what???? TLDR: Annoyingly OP, still mostly follows canon when the character can literally one shot everything from the beginning. No context in regards to the story progression and ZERO character development, also babysits midoriya for some reason? Nothing makes sense when your character is a multiverse level threat, so anything you write is already obsolete.
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It's been 10 months and this is the most sincere review I've had, it was thanks to you that I saw some mistakes and restarted the fic. Well, I can't guarantee that I did something "better" because I write this fic just for hobby and also for fun. If you have time to read and review this new version I would appreciate it, I really liked the way you evaluate things.
