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2024-09-22 19:59

yo author, in your reading list add the mangaka system it may be dropped but it's literally the perfect genshin fic

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Writing Quality:5/5 Better than most fanfic. You can find some here and there, but not any major ones. === Updating Stability: 5/5 Seems like it’s updated fairly. === Story development: 4/5 I liked the story and how it was developed but some things just felt forced. I also felt like MC was just a bit too careless and naive. He go on with things that he know that could harm him, where in fact he could have just waited patiently for something else and worked over it. (That Vacher situation where he noticed Vacher staring at his companion but still didn’t plan on what could happen later on with that) This makes the plot feel a bit too forced. There is also a golden rule of reincarnation that was violated: never tell anyone that you’re reincarnated. It takes away the magic of the story. Character will just feel existential crisis; and instead of that, he could have just said he had prophetic abilities which were going weaker over time. == Character design: 5/5 I’m actually very amazed by how well done this fanfic represented many characters! It used that emotional impact too much with that abandoned child story but it is still better than most story. === World background: 5/5 Genshin impact world, specially Fontaine have some of the best world backgrounds that I’ve ever seen or read about. Top tier story with great characters. ===•=== Overall thoughts: 4.8/5 It’s a great story with great potential if done properly. Right now it seems to be on an critical level as the latest chapters felt a bit boring with too much of an focus on slice of life and character focused story development. It’s not bad to have great character development, but it’s also important to maintain story progression. In the last chapters I felt like dropping it because it somehow felt too boring… Would recommend working something on the latest chapters and future chapters!

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