Review Detail of SecondVoidlord in Yu-gi-oh! Duelist Showdown!

Your story need improvement, First you need to fix the paragraphs in your story. There just three massive word blocks, They need to be way smaller. The next issue you need to fix is character development. I have no reason to keep reading this since all your characters read like cardboard cuts out to me. You need to add details to everything. I have no idea why your character even wants to be in the tournament in the first place. You going to need more then just wanting to enter a another event for a valid reason. I recommend looking at other good story's and copy their format for writing story's