Review Detail of Luis_2221 in Yellowstone: The Return of the Lost Brother, a Yellowstone Fan Fiction

Item: Yellowstone: The Return of the Lost Brother, a Yellowstone Fan Fiction
Rating: 2.8

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Luis_2221Lv33mthLuis_2221

Could be Great. Needs an editor. It’s just one run on sentence , every 3 words is an interjections 90% of the time it’s “and”

Yellowstone: The Return of the Lost Brother, a Yellowstone Fan Fiction

Test_The_Water

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Luis_2221Lv3Luis_2221

Over all you have a great story so far. Once you polish it out it’ll be a damn gem

Test_The_Water:agreed, I have to go through them and edit them properly as well as fix the sentence structure. The "edited" chapter was an attempt to try and fix the grammar issues. Thanks for the review. I think it's fair and agreed. didn't know whether I wanted to go full first person or just an overseer perspective, and the lack of deciding the point of view screwed with any sentence structure left add to the fact that Grammarly changed a fair bit it is chaos I will fix before I write more.

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Test_The_WaterAuthorTest_The_Water

agreed, I have to go through them and edit them properly as well as fix the sentence structure. The "edited" chapter was an attempt to try and fix the grammar issues. Thanks for the review. I think it's fair and agreed. didn't know whether I wanted to go full first person or just an overseer perspective, and the lack of deciding the point of view screwed with any sentence structure left add to the fact that Grammarly changed a fair bit it is chaos I will fix before I write more.

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Test_The_WaterAuthorTest_The_Water

Hey, man, I'm sending another reply to tell you. I updated Chapter 1. If you want to give the final rewrite of chapter 1 a re-read, hopefully, it's better than what it was and the issues resolved. I'm not too sure, though I hope it is better lol

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