I like the start and I like the concept of two high fantasy worlds with different eldritch beings interracting. Like while Momonga was a human, the longer he stayed in the Overlord body, the lower his morals started to drop and with LotM Sequence systems, the higher you go, the more you have to anchor yourself to not lose your humanity. I see great potential in this, hope you keep this fanfic going and deliver us something great.

Really enjoyed it I hope for more in the future, though don't overwork yourself if you are already.

A great fanfic... so please don't drop this

Following the tradition here at Webnovel, I'm giving my fic a perfect 5 stars. Just drop a review, and comment about your opinion on the chapters. Give constructive feedback. English isn't my first language, so if you spot any mistakes, do forgive me and leave a comment. If you have anything that you think can add value to the fic then leave a comment or a review about it. I hope you enjoy reading this Fanfiction.

The overall premise of the story is great. Hope you continue this novel. Starting two characters look great.

Writing quality: great work by the author he doesnt just do the same spells as shown in overlord, the guy has literally created spells and added lore to them and also shown which boss rewards it is he has done some plot twists that are good still his first time he will grow into it but as for a first time writer good work. Updating stability: my last comment of this fanfic was for him to store up chapters soooooo I can’t say anything I’m just here waiting for a mass release. Story development: great use of Yggdrasil and great character creation in the game from getting his own guild to ensuring he has the number one spot to even the number of floors in his guild is just crazy work author has put in the effort the different floors, the different characters used really something. Character design: what can I say one more the descriptions are good and the designs of the worlds sound great. World background: wonderful he really expounded on new elements of the game Yggdrasil. I really enjoyed the Yggdrasil arc especially the gameplay and how he handled things, really great world background even in the new arcs that the story has progressed through he did his research. Overall good story new writer but he is trying his best and is doing well.

Changing mc's destination is not only fooling him, but also readers. Bruce is just jumping through places with no reason to do anything - plotline is just dead after siege on his guild.

porque le das al mc algo que despues se lo vas a quitar? es tan cliche que da asco, literalmente los ultimos capitulos del segundo arco eran muy aburridos y despues me sales con la mamada de que le vas a quitar su gremio, ya se que es tu primera novela pero si vas a quitarle algo o nerfear al mc no lo hubieras dado tantas fuerzas al principio ptt: el tercer arco es aburrido, pones mas a otros personajes que al mc que es el protagonista

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