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Sevnir
SevnirLv151yr
2024-03-15 16:41

Two words: chapter padding. I read to chapter 20, and it keeps getting worse. Seems like 15% of the chapters are repeating or rephrasing something that was mentioned earlier or drawing out the details of character interactions to annoying lengths...all to increase chapter length. Also, the blind girl who has been blind her whole life feels as helpless as someone who just went blind. Should she be impared? Yes. Should she be utterly helpless? No.

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Sevnir
SevnirLv15

Also, the complete lack of information about the MC's powers, stats, and level despite having a system is strange and makes the combat seem unbelievable. How is he bullied, but then solos a boss with no description of any power increase?

AmDevilCrafts
AmDevilCraftsAuthor

Thanks for the review.

Sonu_Siraj_5546
Sonu_Siraj_5546Lv13

is this harem or single fl

AmDevilCrafts:Thanks for the review.
AmDevilCrafts
AmDevilCraftsAuthor

Bro, bro, bro. I have a tag for it. It is single female lead. Why does everyone still ask? I don't get it. Can you enlighten me?

Sonu_Siraj_5546:is this harem or single fl
Sonu_Siraj_5546
Sonu_Siraj_5546Lv13

For starters, you are a harem writer, and most of your audience will be harem-loving. So most writers give in to appease their old audiences and make their new book harem/polygamous.

AmDevilCrafts:Bro, bro, bro. I have a tag for it. It is single female lead. Why does everyone still ask? I don't get it. Can you enlighten me?
Sonu_Siraj_5546
Sonu_Siraj_5546Lv13

still I will give it a try

AmDevilCrafts:Bro, bro, bro. I have a tag for it. It is single female lead. Why does everyone still ask? I don't get it. Can you enlighten me?
AmDevilCrafts
AmDevilCraftsAuthor

oh. but still no harem, NO HAREM, because i have left harem i wont write harem. i also don't like it. I just wrote it cause it was trend. but now I Left it seeing how it was doing

Sonu_Siraj_5546:For starters, you are a harem writer, and most of your audience will be harem-loving. So most writers give in to appease their old audiences and make their new book harem/polygamous.
AmDevilCrafts
AmDevilCraftsAuthor

thank you☺️

Sonu_Siraj_5546:still I will give it a try
Death_Simulation
Death_SimulationLv3

Thank you author for considering to not write the harem because one relationship does represent the reality more. Harem is a trend but real life based story make readers connect with it more and give you honest and loving readers. But be ready for criticism because honest reader always tell you what you are lacking. Thank you. By the way it is not a comment just from reader but also from a writer who does want to change the harem story here. I respect the choice of harem story but for me it is not the reality and only a way to escape your harsh reality. Thank you once again. You can check my novel as well if you want. But don’t expect professional level novels.

Death_Simulation
Death_SimulationLv3

And by coincidence my story is also about evolution.

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