Review Detail of Eden_Mc in The Return of the Cannon Fodder Trillion Heiress

Thank you so much for letting me know, I honestly feel happy to learn that I was able to properly convey each of the character's emotions that I want the readers to feel and honestly, I thought that what I was writing was too serious and only now did I find out that I can also make some laugh which makes me smile from ear to ear. Reading your thoughtful review made me feel that my work is appreciated and supported. Thank you so much!!!

Also Eden, I would love to pin your review on my review page it’s now showing up and is being hidden. Maybe because of the word “S*cked in” 😅😂

If I could edit it I would 😭 I can only delete it and I’m unsure if it would allow me to post a review again or not. I honestly have a lot more to say but wanted to get straight to the point. As a reader, what I expect an author to make me do is feel, think, bask in the emotions present in the characters and story and you’ve excelled in that. Such as in the beginning I wanted to crack open Heras mind and understand why she put so much effort into an individual who didn’t seem to value her or show sincerity even though in later chapters it didn’t get down into great depth verbally her actions showed her thought process, unwillingness, hopefulness, determination to see things through and see if fate could be changed, that she nor those around her are marionettes. I really enjoy her growth and especially her interactions with the villagers, it gives warmth and joy, understanding and potential to learn knowledge from any individual if you have the willingness to listen, Which Hera has always been completely open to. Then to see how each individual has different characteristic and humor 😂 I do love the laughs the boys and Hera & Athena bring me, the aunty villagers as well, honestly each character makes me feel, weather it’s joy and amusement,gratitude for their sincerity, or anger due to their delulu 👀👀👀 (not mentioning those who should not be named don’t need them floating around my comments 😂) I am eager for more and my excitement is buzzing ! Again you are doing wonderfully, make sure to rest well, and pat yourself in the back for bringing your characters to life, it’s not an easy task, and their dialogue comes across so genuinely and seamlessly. You’ve immersed this reader in your story 💜

I am beyond happy at this point reading your feedback, I was mostly scared and double guessing what I am writing everyday, thinking that I may not be able to convey what I imagined or some information might come as some form of scribble. But reading a different perspective about what I wrote made me happy and felt more motivated to continue. I even had to read your feedback, like, three times or maybe more, because that’s how much I feel appreciated right now. Thank you for your genuine feedback and I hope to not let you down as the story progress. 🥰🥰🥰🙏🏻

I appreciate you taking the time to read it. As writers we are our worst critics most times. I write as well but I tend to overthink and hyper focus on what I’m unhappy with such as specifics like the science behind everything or architecture. I have to remind myself not get too sucked into the details or over analyze every little thing I have to remember I’m allowed to be vague and not everything needs to be detailed explanation. I think you’ve done a wonderful job painting the scenes and emotions, the pace makes sense as well as her growth, it doesn’t feel contradictory as the story unfolds. If you had seen a previous comment of mine, I questioned Heras with her family ethics she’s been taught since young the value of hardwork and money to her way of going all out didn’t make sense to me, spending lavishly on a gift when she wouldn’t allow herself a meal after her hard work, but you tied it all together with the later chapters subtly at first with Athena introduction as a child, the why’s and how her mind works throughout, the last ditch effort of hoping the prediction was but a child’s whimsical mind and imagination. Hera seemed to hold an emotional attachment to her ex makes sense as He changes, her fate changes as well, she won’t lose what she cherishes the most ( her grandfather and the subordinates who are family ) who wants to be a fictional character in a book that is a stepping stone for another’s path, her and her grandfathers fate ties with so many others and it holds a very heavy weight. So I can understand why she went all out with her sincierty because she sincerely wishes that Athena predications isn’t her reality. When she realizes this possibility and that sincerity will only be taken advantage of she changes, she begins to strategize and it’s one of trail and error. I can’t determinded if what she felt for her ex was genuine love or one simply of hope as there werent to many interactions between them that was written. ( it’s hard to imagine cause he’s such a tool 😂)but I can make sense of it this way cause expectations and hope can come across as love.

Of course, I read every comment seriously but there are times that I didn't know how to react to some of it because I may accidentally drop a huge hint that may dampen the supposed anticipation for the next chapters or the intentions. But now that I know that you're also a writer, it made me even happier because you understand how I feel, and even received support from you which meant a lot to me. We shared a lot of traits, maybe we just want our work to make sense to the readers that's why we worry over small details. No wonder you can dissect and put the puzzles together so easily!!! It is true that I also criticize myself a little too much and am expecting a better performance from myself. But to think that you're able to get the subtle hints and details that were placed in different chapters makes me happy because others only thought that I was dropping too much information that led to information overload or was unnecessary. So far, you are the first to understand Hera's desperate attempts to get out of the storyline and how her mind works. It made me so happy that my hard work was not for naught. I really appreciate reading a well thought out feedback and connecting with everyone, especially readers so I can also see a different perspective and know where I'm lacking. I don't know how to thank you for this, it eases my anxiety. THANK YOU!!!

On one note I will definitely state as a writer and a fan please remember your audience isn’t one individual, it’s numerous people with complex minds and different ways of thinking, interpretation, and reading comprehension. You can not and will not please everyone so don’t stress yourself and get burn out trying to accommodate, different strokes for different folks, if you feel you’re being too vulgar or gory ( 😂 my expertise ) or too detailed in explation where the reader may feel it has nothing to do with the plot leave a note in the chapter above. I’ve seen authors do this with smut or gore seems a reasonable compromise 1. Without compromising with your own writing and 2 compromising with your paying audience they can fast pass or skip if they so chose. Some of us are more particular some of us care more for leaisure most times it depends on the mood and our previous reads and what we’re in the mood for at that moment. Don’t compromise your story or your characters to where you become unhappy, I send you all the good juju and hugs !

That's a really great offer ꒰๑˃‿˂꒱, Thank you!

Thank you for your kind words and reminders. I also know that I will not be able to please everyone because we all have our own preferences but I am happy enough that there are more people who appreciate what I wrote and sending love and support. This is enough motivation for me...

I’m sure more people who read will fall in love with your story as well! It is honestly truly well written and the dynamics between characters ! *chiefs kiss * I hope you have a lovely day !

Thank you! You are so sweet! I hope you have agreat day too! 🥰