Review Detail of nevershe in Football-Ballon d'or or die [Gacha System]
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The story is very good, the rhythm worries me a little I would like to see more the part in which he becomes professional goes to the base of a team and everything else, makes the story more dynamic and holds the reader with situations that he is familiar, but the story so far is very good and with potential.
Football-Ballon d'or or die [Gacha System]
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Sorry for my lack of elaboration, I want to say that the time when he is only 10 years old, which ends up being a bit 'boring' to read, at least for me as a reader I would prefer the protagonist's advancement to at least the age in which he is in the juniors of some professional team, I probably called this rhythm wrongly, what I meant is that the fact that the protagonist is still 10 years old and is in his initial games makes it seem like this 'arc' will still take a while and kind of discouraging.
fat_gamer:Thanks a lot for your review! Could you elaborate on what you mean by rhythm? Since Nick is just 10 years old, he cannot play professionally until at least the age of 15. I do plan to have him be a part of a youth academy where aspiring football players gather if that's what you are referring to. Again, thanks a lot for the review! And hope you continue enjoying this story!
Thanks a lot for your review! Could you elaborate on what you mean by rhythm? Since Nick is just 10 years old, he cannot play professionally until at least the age of 15. I do plan to have him be a part of a youth academy where aspiring football players gather if that's what you are referring to. Again, thanks a lot for the review! And hope you continue enjoying this story!
Thanks for sharing your opinions. While I agree that the majority of childhood arcs fall flat, I will try my best to make it exciting to read. I intend to have Nick heal and find his core through this arc, as such it is quite important to the story. I hope you continue to stick with it and enjoy reading it!
nevershe:Sorry for my lack of elaboration, I want to say that the time when he is only 10 years old, which ends up being a bit 'boring' to read, at least for me as a reader I would prefer the protagonist's advancement to at least the age in which he is in the juniors of some professional team, I probably called this rhythm wrongly, what I meant is that the fact that the protagonist is still 10 years old and is in his initial games makes it seem like this 'arc' will still take a while and kind of discouraging.