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2024-02-13 01:54

Your writing is easy to read and flows very smoothly. The action scenes are definitely a huge strength as it felt very impactful. While the premise and genre are quite common, your decision to take things slow might result a well polished story. I loved the pacing in the first few chapters. Some advice from me would be attempt a more show don't tell approach. This could be through the thoughts of the MC, or dialogue since omnipotent narrator kills the sense of immersion. Also, revisiting your chapters after you're done writing them a few hours to a day later will help you spot mistakes easily. Overall, a pleasant read and keep posting

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