The dialogues are too dry, you can't feel any emotion behind each dialogue which hurts the reading. It's like reading about robots because they all express themselves in the same way, you can't feel the personality of any character because they all speak the same. What should be done to have a good dialogue would be to complement it with something like, for example: "Hello! Today is a nice day, isn't it?" The young woman approached with the same jovial and happy tone as always. (nejire) Or we also have the case of Eri in this story of which we never know how she feels or what her emotions are because they only reduced her to responding with dry dialogues like yes or no. The protagonist also has no personality or a bit of charisma, he is super boring and there is nothing to say about him, we don't know what his motivations are, his goals or why he does what he does, he only exists and speaks with 0 charisma and emotion Aside from that, the idea of the trading system is interesting and original, it is also good to read about someone who is not always in class 1a of the canon
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