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ElmoRandom
ElmoRandomLv39mth
2024-02-19 11:38

Los diálogos con el mc parecen muy forzados, al punto de que mc tiene que reemplazar el diálogo de otro personaje o decir algo tonto para "destacar" se siente como un pizarrón en blanco y que el autor no añade expresiones o emociones no ayuda ¡Incluso algo que se supone que debe de dar risa o decir algo como WOW parece muy seria![img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

The Powerful Eye System in MHA

Darkened007
4.3
34 Chs

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Young_fruit_Smiley
Young_fruit_SmileyLv14

MEANING - The dialogue with the mc seems very forced, to the point where mc has to replace another character's dialogue or say something stupid to "stand out" it feels like a blank slate and the author not adding expressions or emotions doesn't help! Even something that is supposed to make you laugh or say something like WOW seems very serious!.

9mth
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Darkened007
Darkened007Author

5 star author review. ask whatever questions you want to know about this fic and I'll answer it...................................................

9mth

GuDaoistBigbro
GuDaoistBigbroLv14

hopefully it doesn't become, "Nah, I'd Win". then proceeds to die a chapter later. xd

9mth
Haze_
Haze_Lv4

I can get over the nerfing of the abilities but my two issues are the author has not idea about the abilities he gave the mc and just trying to figure it out on the way like at one point curse technique red hit through infinty for “plot” that literally was nonsense. My second issue is the mc had no affect on the story nothing has changed at all it feel like a rehash of the cannon not to mention his personality gives much the be desired he has a very side character personality he’s just kinda there. That’s just my opinion if you unsure read it and make your own.

8mth
NeaCambelt
NeaCambeltLv1

Bof Les dialogues et les personnages n'ont pas l'air " vivant " [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=fp][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

9mth
SeaaLorde_
SeaaLorde_Lv12

Es como cualquier fanfic de MHA genérico, no tiene inovación y siempre son los mismos escenarios, ni siquiera con algún retoque propio. Más allá de eso, todo bien.

9mth
DaoistOfeOTA
DaoistOfeOTALv4

Eh it’s called a multiversal fic but every thing is nerfed beyond belief so wouldn’t be suprised if it gets dropped at the end of mha arc and the “plot” is legit only folllowing the same as the show nothing has changed despite the future knowledge overall it’s a big meh

9mth
Axus45_Bre
Axus45_BreLv14

This got potential, i love it more please!

9mth
zNoir
zNoirLv2

I'm liking the way the story is going. More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,More chapters please,

9mth
Ace_on
Ace_onLv4

nice fic. nice idea. nice writing. Please upload more chapters.... pls

9mth
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