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CloudSmoke
CloudSmokeLv59mth
2024-03-20 04:15

Every part of this story is forced plot points. It's basically a Gary Stu except that there are constant poorly written in flaws/mistakes that the main character has to work his way around the problem with that is that because they are poorly written, Is that most of the time these mistakes are easily avoidable but like I said, purposely, not avoided, making you really question the characters intelligence. Not to mention the main character is incredibly chaotic in personality Is literally like if you were to mix a child and an adult And throw them into a arrogant teenager it's just pure annoyance anyway I gave writing ability three stars because while this was pretty bad, I do think the author has talent I gave update stability. Three stars because I haven't been around this story long enough to have a clear understanding of how often or well they update Story development I gave one star because well the story started off, fairly strong-ish But went downhill pretty quickly I gave character design three stars because the characters were pretty bad, but bar the atrocity that is the main character. You can kind of sometimes see faint, resemblances of what they were supposed to be. World background I gave four stars simply because the author seems to have done a lot of research, so even though there was a lot of BS all throughout the story, there were some things that made sense

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Ghostrider0002
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Thank you for reading my story, I hope you will continue and that the rest will be more to your liking

CloudSmoke
CloudSmokeLv5

Unfortunately, this was my exit from this story I might try something else you write, but that was it as far as this is concerned

Ghostrider0002:Thank you for reading my story, I hope you will continue and that the rest will be more to your liking
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