Review Detail of Anonymoussammy in Shattering Preceptions

I've been planning this story for a long time, hoping to turn it into a game. However, I realized I wasn't talented enough to do so. Nevertheless, I'm good at writing stories and I put a lot of love into this one because it's my first original. I'd appreciate it if you could share your honest opinion on what you think of it. This story will be lengthy and filled with interesting events, so get ready to be engaged.