Review Detail of Zealous990 in Glitch in God’s Game
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Hey guys, hope you are well. I am a new author and so any feedback you could give me is much appreciated. This can also include ideas for the story moving forwards as well. Also what do you think of the beginning of the novel so far?
Glitch in God’s Game
Zealous990
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hi author, energetic, eager, and enthusiastic reader here, I think this is a good novel, but it would be even better if the MC had more flashbacks to when the village hated him for having the nine tailed fox in him. A good way to subvert expectations would be to introduce a sibling for the MC who pretends to hate them but really loves him. Then make them a love interest. After that, you should introduce the MCs childhood friend who is rather timid and shy. Then make them a love interest. Maybe you can go a bit spicier, and he gets a slave dragon girl who looks 4 but is actually 4000! Then make them a love interes-
I did have one small problem ‐ your MC has too much of a brain. it would be very nice if he became extremely stupid and battle hungry! This would appeal greatly! Remove his entire understanding of social respect and substitute in a love of something trivial like meat. Just think about it, wouldn't it be great if he was the densest person you've ever known? No one wants an intelligent MC.
Also, may I ask when the school arc will begin? I have some fantastic ideas. For one, I think the MC should pretend to be the weakest, but he will stand up to the "young master" of the school and be challenged to an Agni Kai. From there, he destroys him but is sentenced to death by the class president before it turns out the MCs best friend now owns the school. It would be cool if we could introduce about 8 new love interests here as wel–