I think the excuse you gave for the mc was a litle too unimaginative when everyone read in know you're simple forving mc to be slider so he can falow the plot. And while I'm happy about this site having more fanfiction of yugioh gx I noted that it's extremely cliche and repeated scene of mc participating in the exams with the peanut gallery commenting, to the point I thought it's was one I already read before.you could simple skipped the peanut gallery dialogue. Other minor things I noticed and breaker a litle of the immersion is that sometimes you suddenly go from first pov to third. And you switching quick-spell card for speed spell card that is from yugioh 5ds
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