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2024-04-17 17:22

I’m on ch 96 so far a pretty good story but for a reincarnated person from earth who was supposed to be the head of a large business then the MC is not using his knowledge to the full potential. I get the business aspect of it but most people could figure out how to improve tools, weapons, strategy, technology etc from a medieval time to something more modern. Like even making a basic cannon since he is going to be fighting lots. Electricity, windmills, farming tools, axels and spring for wagons, rubber wheels come to mind. There was mention of a magical world yet the only magical thing so far is the MC has mind control and very limited at that. There is mention of archmages but they don’t seem to do anything magical besides making potions which to me is a fancy way to say doctor/pharmacist or better yet alchemist. There is no talk of schools either like at all that’s a basic thing to implement to improve things over time. These are just some ideas. Also don’t forget that his wife from eath was supposed to of crossed over but MC has no thoughts about it at all. These are just some ideas.

I Become The Villainous Last Prince

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WebNovelDaoistGuru
WebNovelDaoistGuruLv15

Forgot to mention about pregnant woman drinking during childbirth anyone from earth would know this is bad yet he keeps letting her drink…

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Rafaiir_
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Thank you for your review. I will think about some of your suggestions, of course related to the business aspect considering that MC already controls food commodities, in this case it is like having a market monopoly. Several volumes will explain this and of course the story still has a long way to go to achieve the throne of Athalaris. I think constructive criticism and suggestions like this are what I need right now, to see the holes in my story. Thank you.

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Rafaiir_
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I'll start forbidding her from drinking, maybe begin with the early symptoms of the effects of drinking when pregnant.

WebNovelDaoistGuru:Forgot to mention about pregnant woman drinking during childbirth anyone from earth would know this is bad yet he keeps letting her drink…
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Rafaiir_:I'll start forbidding her from drinking, maybe begin with the early symptoms of the effects of drinking when pregnant.
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