Review Detail of Nacho4U in Path of the Twin Swords
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Alrighty, for your first novel, this is pretty good! I'll admit, there are writing errors, but that's to be expected and which you can easily fix. I definitely felt like some parts were dragged out for way too long, and naming one off characters only to be killed wasn't exactly necessary either. But there are definitely interesting ideas you managed to create, 'the entity' can easily show up in any of your other stories should you decide to create any. I personally feel like being a cosmic being unable to physically change the world, but influence is an idea I like very much. You can practically make your stories connected somehow, or at least reference this story within your other future ones. Overall, for your first story, it's okay, there are ideas that work and you should develop more. Also tone down the grim dark stuff next time, admittedly that might make people to stop reading entirely and drop your novel.. đ
Path of the Twin Swords
AmorphousVacantia
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Also I really like the concept of choosing your own ending, but i gotta know which one is cannon however haha
AmorphousVacantia:Thanks for your comment. You are absolutely right, I wrote this with awareness. Actually, I could have deepened the story, but I decided not to. For this reason, the backstory part has become very important and I am ambitious about my second novel. I just need to avoid making those typos
Actually, this is the reader's decision because these are 3 different endings that the entity sees. And I think I will postpone my second novel and write short stories. I want to write it in perfect English. It really has great potential.
Nacho4U:Also I really like the concept of choosing your own ending, but i gotta know which one is cannon however haha