the Idea is good and with Charakters and such but the main Propblem is, every Charakter feels like a robott in the way the writing is with a bit Element of "BIG LOL RANDOM" where the structure of the storys doesn't feel thinked out much, this feel more like a sketch movie script then anything else. I would recommend the Autor to try improving thier writing skill espcilly describing How people interreact and thought patterns and how they talk to each other. The Reader does not know how the Charakters came to the conlusion how to do stuff or thier plans, and another point the same with each other Charakter and the MC is thier own reactions in individuell thoughts to the Situation or such. i want to say more but i think that would be to much.

... it's a dumpster fire of confusion ... the story makes no sense, the wishes are senseless. the character is a Mary sue that's learnt nothing but the magic of jazz hands

good find but is he going to drop this too