The snopsis is fvking perfect it's your execution of the story. Like him and valerie passing outside of his old apartment you would recognize the person who saved you no mater how much time passed. And him meeting black cat is completely different to the snopsis. So like I said it's the execution of the story that has me and how stupid it is in parts are is you go back and redo the story to the quality of the snopsis with a lot more time and thought into the time gap between some actions then it would be 5 stars.P.S. Would love to keep reading but until you can fix the story and how stupid he is I wont be reading. (couldn't he have gone to the Baxter buildings and seen if they could figure out straight away?)
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I see, thanks for the review, just a few things I got to point out however. One,when Grim passed Valeria the two never actually saw eachother, I never wrote down that they made eye contact, Valeria only heard footsteps and thought it was a neighbour. And even if they did pass eachother, Grim had his hood up and he looks different from when he did a year ago. Secondly if you had read the Auxiliary you would know that Black cat, the one you're referring to is Felicia's daghter not the original Black cat, Felicia has already retired the mantle of Black Cat and now her daghter is using it.In the future I might Re write the bit with Hades as that's something that's been pointed out multiple times but I think everything else is okay.
Np I didnt realise there was an one of those and thanks for some clarification.
