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2024-01-10 23:18

Its not a bad story. It has a lot of potential. I like the ideas and the character himself. Its pretty good. If there were any problems, it would be that you tell more than show. If you improve on that then the story would be even better. The ideas are there. Its a fanfic so five stars i guess.

The serene Swordsman

Daoist0kxr4h
4.7
17 Chs

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ParadoxMind
ParadoxMindLv13

Hmm, wise words, wise words. *touches nonexistent beard*

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Propht
ProphtLv4

Reveal spoiler

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Cedric_7512
Cedric_7512Lv14

Not a bad story lil bro. But I just can’t give you the full 5 Stars across the board. Sry about that. 😏

10mth
Bullshitter
BullshitterLv14

This fulfilled my desires on so many levels. Such a beautiful story. I hope the author never drops this.

10mth
Passerby_Venne
Passerby_VenneLv14

Great take on the story. The pacing of the first 5 or so chapters is a bit off. But everything else is really good so far (12 chapters.) The chapters are longer than average and it's well written. My only complaint is that the author is releasing three fangics at the same time, which means that the chapter release rate is slow. It would be better if the author focused on a single story at a time, and released at least one chapter a day instead of 1 chapter every 2 days. Waiting two days takes the reader out of his immersion as one might forget what the last chapter was about. But 1-2 chapters a day would surely make this story very popular. There are no other flaws big enough to point out. 4.3/5 stars for this story!

10mth
ParadoxMind
ParadoxMindLv13

Not Bad at all! Although it can get bland a bit, so you can make it more "alive", you know what I mean?

10mth
PikaDEO_978
PikaDEO_978Lv4

u just gota focus on that update stability

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Anmol_Shrestha_7840
Anmol_Shrestha_7840Lv3

Where are the chapters man it always the good novel authors who drops the story . Give me chaptrerssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss

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SAHIL_PREET
SAHIL_PREETLv4

i think mc is aging to fast for soul society int beginning

8mth
bhabba
bhabbaLv13

great story so far, hope you won't drop and #NoHarem

8mth
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