Review Detail of AstralNinja420 in Harry Potter : multi-purpose system

care to explain how? there are some things I can tolerate and some i can't so I'd appreciate the info

I kind of agree here. I have read up to chapter 7, and while I believe the story could be good at this point, I can't get over the grammatical errors. It seems to be unedited throughout. As if the author just typed up the page and hit send, without even using grammarly or anything. And so far, it seems like the story has taken inspiration from multiple different sources, and I believe the author has taken on more than they can handle. The multiple different systems that the author is trying to incorporate could all individually be their own story. I don't know if this author is mature enough as a writer to incorporate this many different aspects. At this point, this is going to go into my future reading list. Hopefully, at that point, someone would have gone through and proofread this story.Also, this is not a critique to stop the author from doing what they do. But I felt like it needed to be said.