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HeavenlyPig
HeavenlyPigLv21yr
2023-12-11 10:44

Approve.The first chapter is extra exciting and intriguing, followed by the awakening of the Mc and his unique skills. So far I didn't find problems in writing quality. That is all! Please upload more chapters 🙏.

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I liked the story. Story progression is going smoothly, and characters are likeable. Horror system is a nice touch for this story. I liked that's it's about apocalypse instead of gates. Despite having some English issues, honestly, they're not that many and not to an unbearable extent. Examples ("have" instead of "has" or "able to" to instead of "in order"), they're few and easily readable. ---------- Currently, I only noticed 2 bad things that I could point out: 1 - Slow pacing when it's not needed to be slow (MC following a child for 3-5 chapters without adding anything to the story. Or when detailing combat and unnecessarily wasting time going into detail about side characters fighting). 2 - Story is about horror and MC has a horror system, and the synopsis is going on about how MC is the ultimate horror where everyone is afraid of him. HOWEVER, what we get is an MC with a conscience, he probably will scare humans by being creepy instead of actually scaring them (like how mad scientists scare people). When I started reading, I at least thought MC is going to have a few screws loose and gets thrilled by scaring others or he might have good intentions but he's so awkward/creepy that he scares people unintentionally. Heck, I thought he might even be an actual sociopath that disregarded his humanity and embraced ghost power. I enjoyed the story but it's not exactly what it conveyed itself as. However, despite that, I never thought the story is lacking. Author made such a good job giving us a glimpse in the first chapter about MC that we get to know his character naturally, MC develops and struggles within the confines of reason, there's no illogical plot armor or courting death. It's a steady story with good world building and good progression.

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