best part of this story is the authors commitment energy invested in the story. he seems like a talented author. The story itself is a bit too dramatic. I dont like how the author phrased in his synopsis that the world's more realistic by the MC being selfish. realism based on our world has no application on a magic ninja world. where the potential despair and hope are beyond the extremes in our world, on both ends. its your world, not a more realistic one. not even close. This MC falls in the range of this apps favorite version. neutral morally. cares about just getting stronger. kinda boring overall. The character growth and all isn't bad per se but its very much dictated on a world made through a very opinionated perception that I can't really find myself accepting or agreeing with at all. I dont feel the author did justice to the naruto characters either. Overall decent but I've seen this kind of MC too many times and I don't find them appealing after the 100th version I've read of him.

Writing quality is good. There are not many mistakes. It's just that, it has Way too much drama. Personally, I don't mind much. But if all the chapters are like this then it might be hard to continue reading. Also, the system is kinda confusing. I didn't know which one is system notification. And why does the MC talk with the system so much! Dose he have a mental problem lol. You( Author ) could write the system notification like this: [ Daily quests: Running=0/100, Sit up=0/100 ] like. Just add a [ ] in the notification that the system give. It will make it more enjoyable.

The story is too dramatic. The mc comments on everything; making it seem like a retelling instead of a story. It would make more sense for the system to be a complaint or commenting system instead of a gamer system. Anyways, it's not for me but is decent in its own ways.

it's just personal opinion fan fiction is story that already know then you create braces off it but this from the first chapter you overhaul the cast so I can't see the history canon it's full new tree with the same casting oc and I don't know what to say

I give it a 3.8 because although I am all for using 'The Gamer' as a stepping stone to create a really good story, I dislike you using it and then completely ignoring it. We did not see the system at all for like 30 chapters and then when it did come it was not even a full drop and you have items and perks and stats that I fell just get ignored. With Horyu's stealth and genjutsu capabilities he should be able to assassinate any kage especially with the training from the owls. I personally feel as though you have strayed from the path although I will stick with the story to see where it goes.

i mean i could have deducted 1 star from story development due to the first chapter...prolouge...honestly feels like its rushed but i think u have it prepared for something else. nice work there and gimme more.....

bro I've read (or atleast tried to)pretty much every single 50k words naruto fic on ff.net but I have to leave 5 stars just for this genius Shisui setup I've never seen before even without reading this fic

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