Estou gostando bastante, e uma história diferente comparada as outra que li, e gosto principalmente da personalidade do mc, bom espero que na história tenha também umas cenas de limoes

I am surprised that your writing person perspective seemed to have changed from the previous work in your Fanfiction of Honkai Impact: Apocalypse. It's a bit disoriented, but it can work well if you get more experience as time goes on since you're still trying out a new person perspective implementing 1st and 3rd perspective (by distinguishing MC to be the first perspective while the others to be 3rd perspective), seeing as how the fight scenes are improving in every chapter. But, perhaps it'll take time. The plot of the story seems kind of interesting especially the Demon King's past. I think you should make your own original novel or something. But, yeah. I didn't really liked Soul Land that much due to it's drama and repetitive story verse with shounen MC faceslapping everyone. But, I hope you can recontinue Honkai Impact 3rd once your done. I like your work, ganbatte!