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LetishaSeraphLv34mth
2024-07-19 14:56

the story was very fast phased, you should have add some twists in the story the hero become so op with out any struggle the destruction of kunoha was so fast. you become so easily bored if no twist you should play with the emotions of your reader to keep them excited of the things that occur make them guests some possible events. if readers emotions keep changing they won't be bored to finish the story of course don't put to much stressful stories sprinkle some sweetness and comedy.

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