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zowjiLv41yr
2023-11-13 19:45

The writing quality can be improved by spacing out the structures of the paragraph but I liked the flow of how the story was going. Seeing the MC being sold off at the start of the story really brings a good idea of where her character is coming from. Overall the novel is written!

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kamal_victorian
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kamal_victorian
kamal_victorianAuthor

Hello, It's author..! If you looking for a sweet couple, hardworking people,Tons of drama and a System..this story is for you. A cute couple aiming for riches.here's the Main Characters...

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Zeera_Jay
Zeera_JayLv12

This is a good read with a gripping plot, the only thing I noticed that needs working is the spacing of the paragraph to make it much easier to read, aside that your book have potential and a good description. Keep it up dear Author.. .

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Shooting_Mushroom
Shooting_MushroomLv4

I really don't know, what to say about this novel.As this was my first time reading a female lead , romance, drama.I had read once, it was like my Loyal Husband After the divorce.===========================================So this is the thing I wanted to say that I hadn't read any novel with this type a lot and which is based, not in a modern era.The story had a Quite story, like it's good and well paced, i like the chemistry of su Yun and shen yu both liked each other but couldn't say its like who will say first.The chapters are bit too described, like a same sentence is getting expanded, author you need to made a simple flow of the words.The grammer is good not exceptional but better,it needs proofreading.

1yr
Maeve_Lindley
Maeve_LindleyLv11

This story is good and it has potential especially as the author says it is becoming very popular! I agree with others you would benefit from a beta reader to check spelling, punctuation and grammar. Keep going :)

1yr
Darja_Renen
Darja_RenenLv3

Some parts are bumpy and it would need a beta reader, but I genuinely enjoyed the story. It’s kinda sweet and I took a liking in female lead.

1yr
Visionary_M
Visionary_MLv12

The story is still in the beginning so we are still learning about the characters and the direction of the plot. So far, I think the pacing is good, since they just met it's normal that their conversations are not yet long. My only suggestion is to recheck word spellings. If you write fast, you can use either, grammarly, prowriting aid or quillbot to catch misspellings for you. Looking forward to how the story will progress.

1yr
Vee_High
Vee_HighLv13

The book is only three chapters and I can already tell it has an interesting twist for us ahead. With how the mc is able to remain calm despite what was happening to her displays her wisdom as someone who has lived a purposeful life before. Though there's still rooms for improvements, author is doing a great job! !

1yr
Treein
TreeinLv12

Although there's not much content released yet, it's clear that this story has a very good beginning. I hope the author can maintain this momentum because I'm eager to see more content soon. Also, as other comments have mentioned, the paragraphs in the novel are too long. The author might consider making each paragraph shorter to enhance the reading experience for mobile users.

1yr
the_spreme_being
the_spreme_beingLv2

The novel has potential, and the characters are good too. My only suggestion is to break down the longer lines so that the text flows through easily. Overall awesome and I would love to see more.

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