Review Detail of Lou_Sole in Devouring the Apocalypse

The grammar and punctuation are quite odd at times but it's legible. The main character's thought processes are a bit difficult to follow at times, but he's not insufferable. The characters are pretty cliche and the exposition is a bit grating at times. Honestly, I feel like a heckler for rating it like this despite only having 10 chapters but there are no signs of improvement. As it stands, this is one of the easiest 2.5/5 ratings I've ever seen, and that's being optimistic. This would benefit a lot from beta reading. If the current chapters were retouched and all the chapters were beta read going forward, I could see this being at least a 3/5 or above eventually.