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2023-11-19 11:15

I don't read 18+ web novels very often but I like where the plot is going. the overall plot structure is good but in terms of the story pace it's a bit slow so I feel your characters are all over the place reading at some points in the story but you have an excellent distribution of dialogue. You also have a distinctive writing style that separates you from other authors which is a huge positive, but I'd like to say you should keep writing this story. Keep working hard author! :D

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