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LtFishLv1510mth
2024-06-16 15:10

the story is rather interesting it starts off rather slow and steady to explain the world and how the system works. it also begins the base of which the main character will grow from. building a cooperation to start a financial development plan. for example. the negative. the chapters are relatively long, and have some very slight errors. I'm not going to pick them out or dock points as obviously I do them too. and the characters see to have only a basic framework of a personality, sometimes it's their other times not so much. lastly it's locked chapters. I can't recommend it to readers who can't afford coins in moderate supply. as the average cost for chapters is around 18 coins. some are 15 at the lowest and others are up to 23. if your not aware how WN works that's the price for 2xFP to unlock, and there is about 5 chapters within the first 25 locked chapters that are " ***do not unlock*** " for one reason or another. thus it has a good start, I personality recommend a re write, to shorten chapters and post the story in a more controlled manner and more affordable to the free readers. even if that means dabbling the chapter count.

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Honest reviews are here.. [Extreme Spoiler Alert] This is a story about an MC who is a Regressor and tries to change his life around this time.. MC has a twin brother, and they are orphan.. MC is a brainer while his twin brother is a brawler.. There are a rank from F (lowest), E, D, C, B, A, S, SS, SSS, EX (highest).. The strongest human existence right now is SS-Rank.. A long time ago, the earth was undergoing awakening, and the system was bestow to humans, but half of humanity was unable to survive and adapt to the change of earth where mana became a part of the world.. System is bestow to every living being: human, animal and plant.. It also included the otherworld race like angels, demons, fair folks, elves, fairies, pixies, and so on.. But unlike the earth, the other world has long awakening.. Not only human lack strength, but they also disadvantage.. The system gives a period of time for protection so the earth can develop before being invaded by the other world.. As they reach certain high, the system make a war declaration between five world: Angel world (3 EX-Grade), Demon world (3 EX-Grade), Fair Folk world (1 EX-Grade), Spirit world (3 EX-Grade) and Human world (1 SS-Grade).. In MC previous life, MC is an S-Rank because mostly, MC is mostly conducting research and developing 19 EX-Rank Elixir.. While his twin brother only reached SS-Rank before got killed by their enemies.. MC is informing about his regression toward his godfather (his father bestfriend) and Godmother (their mother best friend).. Later, MC also informed his twin brother and his long lost Great Great Grandfather (Immortal).. So, the "secret" regression is no longer can be considered as secret because he told them EVERYTHING from the very beginning of the story.. Also, there will be more people who know about their secret later on.. The author also explains many unnecessary things in detail.. For example, the author wrote a great detail about how MC created the "Elixir" step by step for the whole chapter.. and it seems like the author tries to teach the reader "how create Elixir" or as if the author tries to make a book about "Guidelines how to create Elixir".. There are many things that the author explains in very detail.. So, this kinda depends on what your tastes are.. Some people love this because it will make the reader increase their understanding of the story and can help them imagine it better.. While other people's are hate it because they think this is just a waste of chapter (filler).. They don't even care about how the human body function in real life and why should they care on how MC cultivate his Mana in superb detail, it is not like we can use it if we know the detail.. And this is happening for all cases in the novel.. Plus, there are going to be "author notes" at the end of the chapter where it seems like to fill the word count for.. In the first chapter, the first paragraph, you would see the MC talking to us, the reader.. It is a very weird feeling.. Then, in most chapters, there is a moment that, in the middle of the story, the author puts a slice of sentence for the author perspective or the author joke or author reminder.. Moreover, the author note will be more noticeable if he just puts it in once in a while, but the author keeps putting it at the end of every chapter, making it seem annoying.. It is just the same repeated loong essay from the author.. I guess, if we see on the positive side, this author is very talkative and likes to interact with us, the reader, and take his reader word in positive ways.. But I wish he didn't take the negative review seriously but use it as constructive criticism to motivate himself to do better.. He also shouldn't take any bad suggestions or bad advice that would destroy the story or change the path of the story.. I am not going to lie, but this novel is very interesting.. BUT.. Once you stop reading it, you will have a hard time re-read or continuing to read it.. Well, as I caught up to the latest chapter, I no longer feel to read it after the new chapter release.. Well, I priority others novel as I loves them more when I compare your novel and anothers novel.. Firstly, this novel has two protagonists because they are twin boy.. and they do it together in everything.. I hate "nakama" power or "friendship" power.. So, MC is not soloing and unique as he shares everything with his twin.. He even shares EVERYTHING with Godfather and Godmother twin child.. Second, every 5 chapters, there WILL be new people know MC secret that he is Regressor and MC will tell them EVERYTHING, about previous life, about him being Gemini Primogenitor (with his twin), about him has EX-rank in everything and ALL others secret.. There are too many people who know the secret.. Third, the story is extremely detailed in EVERYTHING.. It is like the author tries to write a book, "How to do bla bla bla" or "Guidelines of bla bla bla".. It really feels like the author teaches the reader how to make a pill or how to use a mana in real life.. Fourth, the update stability is ways too slow.. and it is getting bad into worse right now.. The latest chapters are Ch.81 right now, but don't forget this novel already came up 7 months ago.. Plus, there is a TON of mistake chapters.. You would see the author write "DON'T UNLOCK THE CHAPTER" like 6 times.. So, you can say the average for update is 10 chapters per month.. If you don't mind all that, go ahead and read it then.. Believe me, this is a really good novel, and if only MC is not sharing EVERYTHING with others or telling too many people, I also will fall in love with this novel.. But what can we say, this novel is not for everyone?? Everyone have their own preferences??

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