the concept is good, the execution is poor, too dumb of a story for my taste.

important your writing and do something with mc characteristics because it look like a fool and with that stupid lafter it look like proper joke it look like you are writing first time so please read what you have written so far before posting more chapters or overall it look like a story dog liker,fool, unstrategic, unliterate stupid that beat around the bush with a stupid laughter her.🤔🤭😌😔🤕🤢🤮😵

I dared to watch 15 chapters, I'm sure no one can overcome my masochism... frankly as others have said the basic idea is great, but the story seems written by a 10 year old child it's is maddeningly simple.

Good idea. Everything else is horrible. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

terrible writing...writer really needs to step up and improve by A LOT

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Great read! Mysteries, supernatural and superpowers. Romance too. Give it a try.

Writing Quality a little bit of correct paragraph construction will make wonder for this work Stability of Updates updates are regular Story Development a little bit fast but manageable Character Design quirky is the only description i can give to the MC World Background hmmm, situated in Earth, so it is just a so so In General if you see pass the a quite poor quality of writing (I read worse) you will find it enjoyable. My bet on which universe he fell into is Marvel. Being in DC is non-sensical since he will not be unique on having a lantern ring. hope the author will not drop this fan-fiction puso lang!