Hey! I just finished reading 4 chapters and I have a couple things to say: Number one, this could just be me, but I think you used passive voice a bit too much, while the story has an interesting premise, I also struggled to discern character dialogues, and there were certain point in between some chapters where some descriptions broke the immersion for me, but if you correct all of those things, it's a really great story!
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