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ProPug
ProPugLv31yr
2023-10-26 23:34

Hey! I just finished reading 4 chapters and I have a couple things to say: Number one, this could just be me, but I think you used passive voice a bit too much, while the story has an interesting premise, I also struggled to discern character dialogues, and there were certain point in between some chapters where some descriptions broke the immersion for me, but if you correct all of those things, it's a really great story!

Traces Of The Heart

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18 Chs

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Hi Propug! Thank you for your sincere comments! I'll try to improve even more!

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From the setting to the feelings, I could feel it all!❤️‍🔥 It's definitely one of my favorites!✨ I'm looking forward to the next chapters, and I confess I'm also a little scared of what Jin Jin and Ah Reum can suffer.🥹 That spoiler in the synopsis kills me!😭

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Rosewater15
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A cute little romance story to read before bed or in your free time! both leads are adorable, shame there are only so few chapters. Write more author! lol

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After diving into the pages of the story, I'm enchanted by this thrilling love story full of twists. The plot unfolds in a charming patisserie in Seoul, and the characters, Jin Young and Ah Reum, are intricately developed, making them truly captivating. An astonishing narrative with unexpected turns, and the emotional climax following a tragic accident is breath-taking. A unique and engaging love story that goes beyond clichés, it's an unforgettable read for those seeking romance and emotion!!!!!

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Lo_rezi00
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firstly I'd like to start with the synopsis,it's not really attractive to readersthe story is really nice and I love the flow.I hope our author can improve his narration and work on his synopsiscan't wait to read more^_^

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New_Gray
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I liked this little story so much. It has a consistent and captivating rhythm and I love how sweet their love is and they get to know each other little by little. I loved I loved I loved! Looking forward to the next chapters, thank you author❤

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This is such a good book with a cute romance, and the FL is pretty as well and now I already care so much about her. .. I love how the story unfolds so far..

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CosmicArchmage
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This novel is an exciting journey that left me breathless! From the thrilling flight attendant training lessons to the flirtations and secrets revealed among the main characters. Every chapter is filled with surprises and moments that make you crave more. Thank you to the author for this incredible experience!

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A story with a plot and captivating characters. The way they meet is so funny lol and the story follows sweetly as they get to know each other. Very good!

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Rara_Jasmin
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It's truly an amazing story, author. I'm thoroughly enjoying it, and I've only read four chapters, but I'm already captivated by the narrative. However, I've noticed that there's a slight need for sentence clarity in terms of identifying the speaker. This is just my personal opinion, author. I look forward to reading more chapters.

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LanumKing
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So the opening was a bit slow but the overall atmosphere that the writer creating is interesting and he determined the plot right in chapter 2 which was good. And i love how the sub plot isn't rushed but instead takes its time ti built up i hope the story keep bring in new interesting things!

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