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Lua_CLv11yr
2023-10-28 23:15

Hi Author! The story reminds me a lot of Douluo, one of my favorites! I don't know, maybe that's why I felt it lacked a bit of emotion. But overall, it's obviously not bad! The idea of being reborn in a new world is always painful and interesting, at least in the aspect that was Einar's death. I advise you to revise the narrative of the facts, especially in the first chapter, it will have a better impact on the readers. It has a lot of potential!

The Chronicles of Gaia

SJM07
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Thank you for the feedback! I am aware that this is a major flaw in my writing and I will try to improve it as much as I can! Please continue your support as it's a great source of motivation for me.

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SJM07:Thank you for the feedback! I am aware that this is a major flaw in my writing and I will try to improve it as much as I can! Please continue your support as it's a great source of motivation for me.
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Hey there, Author here. The 5-star rating is obviously just to get your attention, not even I am conceited enough to give my own work 5 stars. I just want to let you know that I'm aware that the writing is quite terrible at the start, but I would really appreciate it if you gave it a chance. I do promise it will get better as I get into the flow. I would also really appreciate comments, they allow me to better my work and understand what works or doesn't work. Thanks for reading!

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just good stuff honestly, wish the author updated more frequently though.

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