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SHCH7Lv11yr
2024-03-06 20:02

The concept for the story is good, but 15 chapters in, and it's clear that the MC has no personality of his own. The MC's actions can be explained by "He sleeps, he talks to Luna, he sleeps..... " It started to get less interesting as the story progressed.

Harry Potter : A Better Ronald Weasley

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BeastNaBh
BeastNaBhLv3

Bro I no you are just translating it, so I'll not make your work harder. but i am dropping this because it gets less and less interactive with the story it's like ”he did that, than that happened and than they fought like this and than this happened" I am sorry bro but this feels like reading a story made by AI(I have read stories wrote by AI so I know the difference) soon there will be more people like me who will drop this because same reason. But keep up the good work bro even though I don't like this work doesn't mean somebody else won't like it. There has to be some reader who likes the story, so bye and have a good day.

1yr

LastGod
LastGodLv5

good try but very immature writting and also almost not editing leaving some sentences or paragraphs totally missing needed information. Like me having to decipher how he got a letter for hogwarts early but turned it down. that should have been spelled out. then the same thing was done for luna... are hogwarts letters candy that can be given out whenever??

1yr
Daoist6hMUzG
Daoist6hMUzGLv4

Absolutely wonderful story, it is definitely a work done very well ...

1yr
DaoistWsow5U
DaoistWsow5ULv3

Starts of ok but the story jumps around and it’s mostly dialogue between characters. It would be fine but not once did the author write it properly. It was always like this: Ron:…. Harry:… Ron:…. Ginny:…. Feels very poorly written and seems very Ai generated or it’s a translation. It’s not so great of a story and very shallow

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volahanis
volahanisLv3

Absolutely love this author. no useless details that bore you to death

1yr
Nefistoteles
NefistotelesLv13

A good novel that I recommend reading, as always this author's novels are short and his biggest flaw is that he condenses the story too much to the point that it almost seems like a summary and without a doubt a slower and more detailed narration would benefit from it, but still it's worth it. everything, without a doubt you have to read it

1yr
l0rdphant0m
l0rdphant0mLv4

the story is quite good and it may be even more better if the translation quality was better so im offering to proofread for u just reply if u want

3mth
King_MuFasa300
King_MuFasa300Lv14

This was a great read a few grammatical error here and there but that's negligible. To say English isn't the authors first language the wrote exceptionally well..and for an op character they made the story very palatable...5 out of 5...finna check out the authors other works

8mth
GarudaTranslation
GarudaTranslationLv14

a good read, thank you..................

11mth
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