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EnviDiaLv1210mth
2024-02-23 20:00

Although the story from the beginning somehow cliche and you can predict the scenes, the way the author tells the story is captivating, I'll stick around reading this, it has potential.

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thank you fellow author^^

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CHZ
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This story shows potential with its intriguing werewolf romance premise. The Alpha/mate trope is well-established and always draws readers in. The opening chapter does a nice job establishing the setting and power dynamics of the wolf pack. However, Luna's characterization could be strengthened. Beyond her status as the Alpha's daughter, her personality and motivations aren't yet clear. More could be done to make her feel like a fully-fleshed out protagonist from the start. The central conflict around Luna's mysterious curse is an interesting hook. But some context was missing around the curse's origins and effects that would heighten the stakes. A bit more world-building on werewolf culture/history could also enrich the story. Pace-wise, the initial meeting and growing attraction between the characters moved rather quickly. Their banter had some nice moments of tension but could be further developed to deepen their connection and make the romance feel more organic over time. That said, the author demonstrates a solid grasp of voice and story structure. Descriptions are vivid and help transport the reader to the lush forest setting. Overall the story has potential if characters continue gaining complexity and the curse's mystery is unravelled in an engaging way. With further development of themes, relationships and backstory details, this could become an immersive supernatural romance that keeps readers eagerly awaiting each new chapter. The foundations are there - building outward from them could take this story to the next level.

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