There are few chapters, however it has a nice turn of events and its going pretty well. I'll point some topics to improve it: Writing Quality: In overall, its good however it can be improved to be even better. I suggest to study some books with a known writing quality, like The Name of the Wind from Patrick Rothfuss. Character Design: I think you did a good job with the MC, however its lacking a bit with the other character, by "lacking" a mean, just a bit of description of their picture. Like the MC's father. Would be really great to have it. World Background: So far, so good. Overall tip: I think you're the right path, however you only to polish a bit the road and cut some grass and obstacles, so that the river's flow can smoothly go well. All in all, keep up the good work.
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